Thursday, October 15, 2009

Flash 55-Pinochio

Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.
With a nod to Raven and Quilly
( This week's Raven's words were really, really, really wonderful.-17 words out of the 55)early morning light, Pinocchio, mist, leaves, sandy, coffee, walking, traffic, pray, stomach, train, art, admirable, cotton, fluffy

Morning Adventure

Pinocchio looked through the mist in the early morning light to the sandy beach were Geppedo was walking. With admirable art he ground the fluffy, cotton like ,coffee leaves and made a stomach pleasing brew. Now he would pray that the traffic would be light and that the train leaves on time for his trip.


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And Now for something completely different. And we mean completely different.
First there is poetry- written well by a few experts. You know it when you see it.

Then there is poetic drivel- written by many. Lots of fun and often punny.

Then below them all is quivel.
The following is quivel.
It in no way even pretends to be poetry or drivel.
Instead it is something that looks like a poem, uses at least three of Quilly’s words.
In this case it is also a flash 55 quivel since it has eleven lines with exactly five words to a line. Please, again, note this is a quivel it does not pretend to be a poem or even poetic drivel.
Utible Things

Utible things I am told
Can be new or old
Nubivigant gliders that fly free
Carrying away you and me
Or a very special lotion
Healing tenellous spot in motion
Candy from the tragematopolist’s place
Energy burst for the race
Phalerae from very long ago
Laid out in a neat row
Utible things not for show



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17 comments:

  1. Susan at Stony RiverOctober 15, 2009 at 5:27 PM

    Good luck Pinocchio! What a challenging list of words, but I can *see* that story! And as always, much enjoyed the quivel!

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  2. Charlene AmsdenOctober 15, 2009 at 6:06 PM

    I hope Pinnocchio's nose doesn't punch a hole in the plane.

    And this Quivel is much worse than the last Quivel I read, which of course means I could better understand it. ;)

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  3. g-manOctober 15, 2009 at 6:20 PM

    Utible is much better than Unutible!!
    Magnificent 55 Hot Breath!!
    Thank you so much for this Undrivel!
    Have a Wonderful Week-End.....G

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  4. Maude LynnOctober 15, 2009 at 6:38 PM

    I never knew that Pinocchio could make coffee!

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  5. Brian MillerOctober 15, 2009 at 8:52 PM

    haha. can a puppet make coffee, or perhaps he is a real boy now. the quivel is just astounding. nicely played.

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  6. anthonynorthOctober 16, 2009 at 12:43 AM

    Another excellent 55 and quivel. And Pinocchio wouldn't even need a spoon to stir the coffee.

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  7. AnonymousOctober 16, 2009 at 1:02 AM

    Does Pinocchio stir the coffee with that growing nose? LOL. Well done my friend.

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  8. Dulçe ♥October 16, 2009 at 2:28 AM

    Pinochio's trip I... see some romance in this. YOu dragons have feelings!
    Mine is posted as well.
    Nice weekend to you all naughty dragons ***

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  9. AnonymousOctober 16, 2009 at 2:57 AM

    Coffee ... that reminds me, time for my own. Great 55 and wonderful use of the 17 Raven words. Well done.

    My 55 is posted here.

    Have a wonderful weekend.

    Chef Kar

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  10. NessaOctober 16, 2009 at 3:03 AM

    I see Pinocchio's nose growing.

    Your 55's are very utible for a laugh.

    Death and mayhem in my 55 HERE.

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  11. Hootin AnniOctober 16, 2009 at 4:15 AM

    I'm with Anthony on this....and Pinocchio's spoon. I thought similar things as I read your post too.

    My 55 is a twist on Ichabod this week. [scroll down below my Show n Tell as always] Here is my 55

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  12. clean and crazyOctober 16, 2009 at 5:28 AM

    where is pinocchio going?

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  13. DawnTreaderOctober 16, 2009 at 6:51 AM

    We humans decided to offer you dragons an award. I'm afraid it is not edible but I hope you might perhaps like to look at it anyway. I'd be honoured if you would like to visit this post of mine at The Island of the Voices. Award stipulations made by and for humans of course only apply to dragons only if they really want to. (In fact, I even leave the humans free to do what they want with that part.)

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  14. Monkey ManOctober 16, 2009 at 8:29 AM

    I would like to see the train that fits a dragon. I can picture the grand size and seats filled with colorfully scaled, bespectacled creatures reading morning papers and sipping coffee or dragon tea. Breakfasting on pigs in a blanket...literally. Picking teeth with Pinocchio's legs. My 55 is also up.

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  15. DonnettaOctober 16, 2009 at 8:43 AM

    Very good, Pinochio! And Utible Things reminds me of TS Eliot's Cats. Interesting! D

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  16. AkelamaluOctober 17, 2009 at 8:15 AM

    YOu always make it look so easy!

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  17. JessieOctober 19, 2009 at 6:15 AM

    I know I'm late ... and my apologies to the dragons.

    The Pinochio story was great, you put him in a totally new environment -- you made him a grown up!! Loved it!

    Utible Things was just as great ...

    how do you make it look so easy??? you dragons are smokin' hot!!!

    smiles,

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