With a nod to Raven and Quilly
So it was that the doctor prescribed hummingbird extract with mustard for the brigadier general who had an attack of apoplexy on the shallow end of the pool during his daughter’s casual slumber party.
There he fell on the large Golden Parallelogram he had so carefully designed in his greed.
The
old monk hated this
old monk hated this
vision.
And Now for something completely different. A flash 55 quivel. Something that looks like a poem, uses at least three of Quilly’s words and has five words to a line for eleven lines.
The Elephant
Wanted for his magic bone
The elephant stood all alone
Nescience would take his life
To get a fertile wife
By susurrus they all knew
Propinquity made it seem true
Alert he had to be
So he could be free
They would run him down
Drag him all through town
Sad ending for a King
Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.
Wanted for his magic bone
The elephant stood all alone
Nescience would take his life
To get a fertile wife
By susurrus they all knew
Propinquity made it seem true
Alert he had to be
So he could be free
They would run him down
Drag him all through town
Sad ending for a King
Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.
Very nice but can you really keep a king down?
ReplyDeleteHey hey hey...Am I being invaded by Cheeseheads?
ReplyDeleteI'll say this...I LOVE IT!!!
Thank You so much for this weeks twin 55's.
BTW...I haven't heard the word PROPINQUITY since college.
Please join in the fun again next week.
And have a Great Week-End...G
'Girte hain she sawar hi maidaane jung mein
ReplyDeleteWoh tifl kyaa gire hai jo ghutnoon ke bal chale!'
Its the kings who ride in the battle field that tend to fall/ Falling is not for a baby that knows nothing but to crawl!
BRAVO!!!
ReplyDeleteYou know... 800 years from now someone is going to wonder "what is a quivel?" and they're going to try to find it in the dictionary and it's going to say
Quivel - n. -2009 - 2012 - writing that looks like a poem and acts like a poem but must be so bad as to not BE a poem, always enlisting at least 3 Quillyisms.
Of course, then they are going to go in search of whatever in the world a Quillyism is - but at any rate, they are going to wonder HOW quivel came to be extinct!
A deucedly clever piece of prose... you should introduce it to David McMahon at Authorblog. This kind of thing would be right up his alley!
ReplyDeletemost masterfully done weaving those words into such a tight form. bravo, indeed.
ReplyDeleteA slumber party could bring on an apoplexy in the most battletested warriors. lol
ReplyDeletegreat 55. well done.
ReplyDeleteI love the diversity between the 55s. But the latter one's sad ending makes it my favorite.
ReplyDeleteGreat 55s!
Very good 55 submissions.
ReplyDeleteYou're just toooooo good at this - combining 55s, wordzzles and quilly's words - fantastic!
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