Friday, April 3, 2009

Flash 55

With a nod to Raven and Quilly

So it was that the doctor prescribed hummingbird extract with mustard for the brigadier general who had an attack of apoplexy on the shallow end of the pool during his daughter’s casual slumber party.

There he fell on the large Golden Parallelogram he had so carefully designed in his greed.


old monk hated this


And Now for something completely different. A flash 55 quivel. Something that looks like a poem, uses at least three of Quilly’s words and has five words to a line for eleven lines.

The Elephant

Wanted for his magic bone
The elephant stood all alone

Nescience would take his life
To get a fertile wife

By susurrus they all knew
Propinquity made it seem true

Alert he had to be
So he could be free

They would run him down
Drag him all through town

Sad ending for a King

Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man (Mr Knowitall). The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.


  1. Very nice but can you really keep a king down?

  2. Hey hey hey...Am I being invaded by Cheeseheads?
    I'll say this...I LOVE IT!!!
    Thank You so much for this weeks twin 55's.
    BTW...I haven't heard the word PROPINQUITY since college.
    Please join in the fun again next week.
    And have a Great Week-End...G

  3. 'Girte hain she sawar hi maidaane jung mein
    Woh tifl kyaa gire hai jo ghutnoon ke bal chale!'

    Its the kings who ride in the battle field that tend to fall/ Falling is not for a baby that knows nothing but to crawl!

  4. BRAVO!!!

    You know... 800 years from now someone is going to wonder "what is a quivel?" and they're going to try to find it in the dictionary and it's going to say

    Quivel - n. -2009 - 2012 - writing that looks like a poem and acts like a poem but must be so bad as to not BE a poem, always enlisting at least 3 Quillyisms.

    Of course, then they are going to go in search of whatever in the world a Quillyism is - but at any rate, they are going to wonder HOW quivel came to be extinct!

  5. A deucedly clever piece of prose... you should introduce it to David McMahon at Authorblog. This kind of thing would be right up his alley!

  6. most masterfully done weaving those words into such a tight form. bravo, indeed.

  7. A slumber party could bring on an apoplexy in the most battletested warriors. lol

  8. I love the diversity between the 55s. But the latter one's sad ending makes it my favorite.

    Great 55s!

  9. You're just toooooo good at this - combining 55s, wordzzles and quilly's words - fantastic!